There is an obligatory class that call Labor Education which means all freshman in Chaoyang has to clean the camp. As school says, Labor Education can make us have more responsibility. Also, it makes us have a habit that would not throw trash everywhere.
When it comes to Labor Education, I think no one would like it. In my class, every students all complain about it. Of course, I am one of them. Labor Education is divided to three times: in the morning, in the afterning and in the evening. Due to my school timetable so I choose the morning time. However, it is so hard for me to get up at 6:30 in the morning everyday. I remember when I was a senior high student, all I need just get up at 7:00 in the morning. So, I can’t understand why we should take this job. What’s more, the job is also not fair. Some people work is easy and others is difficult. It is all decided by the leader.
But there are still have some advantage. Due to we have to clean the camp everyday so that keep school’s envirnment clean. Moreover, we could make some friends that from others department.
Well, I'm not sure if they really are advantages. :D:D
ReplyDeleteHi Grace,
ReplyDeletePlease revise the following mistakes.
1. There is an obligatory class that call Labor Education which means all freshman in Chaoyang has to clean the camp.
第一camp??
第二that call文法有問題
2. Also, it makes us have a habit that would not throw trash everywhere.
改: Also, it helps/trains us to have a habit that would stop us from throwing trash at will.
3.In my class, every students all complain about it.
檢查every students 跟 complain
4. Of course, I am one of them. Labor Education is divided to three times: in the morning, in the afterning and in the evening.
用sessions取代times
5. Due to my school timetable so I choose the morning time.
加逗號於due to my school timetable之後， 並去掉so，time改session
6. However, it is so hard for me to get up at 6:30 in the morning everyday.
把everyday改副詞
7. I remember when I was a senior high student, all I need just get up at 7:00 in the morning.
改: all I needed to do was get up ...
8. Some people work is easy and others is difficult.
請修改
9. But there are still have some advantage.
檢查 there are...have...advantage(s)?
10. Due to we have to clean the camp everyday so that keep school’s envirnment clean.
第一due to加名詞，所以用: due to the fact that we have to clean the campus every day,
第二、我看不懂你的so that keep schoo's environment clean是什麼英文
11. Moreover, we could make some friends that from others department.
"that from others department"請大修特修