When is comes to holiday, people always think about to go traveling. However, there are many kinds of travel, and backpacking travel and tour travel trip would be the most option that people choose.
As far as I am concerned, I think most of the students would like to go backpacking travel. They can just go with best friends so that can enjoy themselves to the full. In this way, they also can go anywhere and do anything they want. Also, they are not restricted by the route so that they can take step slowly and enjoy the trip. However, if they run into any trouble in the trip, they have to solve up by themselves. On the other hands, most of the family would like to go tour traveling. They just have to pay the money and choose the country they like, they don’t have to worry about the route. What hotel to live, where to eat and which place has the most beautiful scenery all of these are planed by the travel agency. All they have to do is to enjoy the route. However, it would have something that not satisfied, but they can just to bear. This is why I won’t choose the tour travel reason.
This comment has been removed by the author.
ReplyDeleteThe introduction is fine, and the contrast in the second paragraph is clear. It is also nice to see you develop a thesis statement although it didn't meet my expectation of a comparison-contrast thesis statement. If you would review slides 9 - 11, you would find out what I am saying here.
ReplyDeleteAdditionally, since this homework was for you to practice writing a comparison-contrast journal, it would be better if you could talk about similarities, too.
In addition to the article structure, you may like to revise some minor mistakes in line 1 (is come), line 2 (However...but), and line 5 (so that can enjoy ). By the way, you may also like to use 'this is why' in place of 'this is that' in the second line from the bottom. :)